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Oh Moon

August 23, 2010
By BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments

Oh Moon,
Oh bright, bright Moon,
How can you move me so,
When you are many hundreds of miles away?
Your terrible beauty creeps
Through the night,
Pure as a cold mountain spring.

Sometimes I look upon your distant splendor,
And I find myself upon you.
I look about myself,
at the dust and the rocks that are gray as ash,
and marvel at how different you are when close.
The I turn toward the horizon,
and see a sight that takes my breath away.
The Earth.
I stare at this wondrous orb
That is made up of swirls of blue, green and white.
Stare until my eyes sting and I am forced to blink.
And I am back where I was,
Looking upon your far-away face.

Oh Moon,
Oh bright, bright Moon,
The Earth, with its constant change and possibilities,
Is infinitely more beautiful than you.

The author's comments:
I was looking at the moon one night, and it was so bright, it was almost blinding. Then I just had to write this.

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This article has 8 comments.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 8:17 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Wow. Im. amazed. :) that was fantastic and brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:53 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Thanks! It's sort of like how I think trees are much prettier than emeralds.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:16 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
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Wow, this is really good and original! I love how you start with admiring the moon and then change to earth. :)

on Jul. 28 2011 at 11:24 pm
b_gomez114 BRONZE, East Haven, Connecticut
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this is great; kudos for the way you use your language to make the moon more than just an object, as you speak to it

Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 8:28 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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"Where to, Miss?"
"To the stars."

I agree with Garnet77; you took something common and made it infinitely unique.

on Jul. 5 2011 at 12:10 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

This is really good! I love poems that just describe something that's so common, and you did a wonderful job of it. :)

on Jun. 18 2011 at 5:21 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I agree with "thewriteidea" - you turned the moon into something almost magical! I love picturing this scenario in my mind. My interpretation is that you're so intrigued by the moon until you're turned around to see the earth. Seeing the earth makes you realize the moon distances itself because it cannot compete with the earth's beauty. Even if I got it all wrong, your writing skill is all RIGHT. :) Great imagery!

on Oct. 3 2010 at 2:05 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

very well written! you have a fabulous way of describing something. you make the moon, which seems to simple and mundane, sound so powerful and almost magical.

check out some of my work, too if you'd like. keep writing!