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Slipping away

August 9, 2010
By IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

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A taste of something sweet
Snatched from my mind.
Sharp,
Broken,
Clear,
but hazy.
A forgotten dream,
an epic fantasy my mind played
in my sleep.
Enjoyed.
Savored,
like a small bite of
clear,
dark chocolate.
Lost-
except for stinging bits and pieces-
upon the morn.
My dreams-
And My childhood-
are slipping away.

© Amy R., Yardville, NJ

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Not really, but a concept nontheless.
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IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 22 2011 at 4:28 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

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Haha, thank you very much :) 
SecretFlame PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 16 2011 at 11:02 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 373 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

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I loved this! The bit about dark chocolate made me hungry and really brought what you were saying to life in my mind. This was a great poem!
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 13 2011 at 3:51 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

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Thank you very much :) I do believe that you are a stargirl, Aderes, in your own easily-relatable sort of way.
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:05 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

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I can also relate to this poem a lot. :)
Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 2:05 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

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This is very beautiful. :)
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 6:35 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

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I rather enjoyed writing this, so I am very glad that you enjoyed it :)

I love how you described it :D Your words are beautiful.

Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 5:35 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

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Goodness, this is tragically beautiful. I love your metaphors and well chosen adjectives. Once again, you display intricate complexity veiled by simplicity. I love it. It was so sad, and I know the feeling.