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June 6, 2010
By yes_i_am SILVER, Faizabad, Other
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yes_i_am SILVER, Faizabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"not all those who wander are lost"

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My Trust is a feeble thing,
I have starved her so long,
You'd think she escaped
From Auschwitz
She's barely alive.

Desperate for a home,
She roams,
in the blue,blue skies,
But does the sparrow ever nest,
Where her broken eggs lie?

© Julia S., Haddon Heights , NJ

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_AMZ_ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 13 2010 at 1:23 am
_AMZ_ BRONZE, Hemet, California
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Yes, I do love poetry. I am not very good at writing it though so I read it. I love what words can do, how they can make someone feel or think. It is amazing.
yes_i_am SILVER said...
on Jul. 11 2010 at 10:35 am
yes_i_am SILVER, Faizabad, Other
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gee.. thanks..u seem pretty interested in poetry..i too like short poems especially witty ones
_AMZ_ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 11 2010 at 10:31 am
_AMZ_ BRONZE, Hemet, California
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Oh, I read and commented on the original version. I think I like that one better, it is short and makes an impact. I feel that the short poems are usually that way. They can be deep and meaningful without being wordy. With something like trust, I think it is better to impact with little words. It is a fragile topic and a condensed poem would fit the "feeble trust" you are portraying through words.