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May 27, 2010
By MRSoftServe SILVER, Hartland, Wisconsin
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My family all has different hands. My grandpa’s hands are log cabins. They are large and tough, and even though they have seen many years of storms and weathering, they still are strong and working. My mom’s hands are like smooth rocks that have taken years to smooth under the constant current of a river. They are smooth now but bear the resemblance of the rough hands that once built her life from the ground up. My sister’s hands are diamonds. They are dainty and small, but are much stronger than you may think just by looking at them. My hands are Tootsie Roll pops. They are tough on the outside, but there is a small soft center in the middle. How many licks would it take to get there? The world may never know.

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DubiousDamsel BRONZE said...
on Jun. 30 2010 at 7:53 am
DubiousDamsel BRONZE, Weddington, North Carolina
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Great concept! You have lots of insightful little metaphors - I particularly like the diamonds and the tootsie roll pop. However, it'd be a lot better if you worked on finding some synonyms to make it less repetitive; for instance, using the word 'smooth' three times gets a little tedious. Overall, though, it's a lovely and thoughtful piece - just needs a little polishing! :)