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March 28, 2010
By Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
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Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

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I’m in that place,
Where I’m not asleep yet,
But I’m not dreaming,
I’m aware of what’s going on,
But my eyes are closed,
And everything’s somehow cloudy and blurred,
I feel no pain,
I feel absolutely nothing,
But somehow I know I’m alive,
I’m thinking,
But not voluntarily,
Just existing,
Not doing anything,
I’m perfectly fine like this,
I could stay here forever,
In this middle world,
In between the blissful dream world,
And the dark, miserable real world,
I’m perfect,
For now.

© Hannah B., Princeton, IL

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This article has 10 comments.

charlygirl11 said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 9:33 pm
Yeah no problem.
Sarbear GOLD said...
on Aug. 23 2010 at 7:55 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

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your welcome:) i appreciate the feedback!
charlygirl11 said...
on Aug. 22 2010 at 12:30 am
Hey, this one was my favorite! i loved your detailed description and I can truly relate. Thanks for the comment on my picture by the way!
DaisyC. said...
on Jun. 15 2010 at 6:40 pm
DaisyC., North Bennington, Vermont
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that was great!!! I love that "middle world" sooo much and you captured it perfectly :)
Sarbear GOLD said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 7:23 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

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thanks.. it was really hard to explain but im glad you know what i'm talking about!
Sill_Sitter11 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 5 2010 at 3:57 pm
Sill_Sitter11 BRONZE, Milan, Ohio
3 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.

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OMG DON'T YOU JUST LOVE THAT FEELING!!! I'll just be laying their with the tv on... and I know I'm not asleep but the next thing I know... a totally different show is on. You couldn't have described it better... no one could have.
Sarbear GOLD said...
on May. 21 2010 at 8:01 pm
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

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thanx for commenting :) haha i run track too! and i'll definately check out some of your work
faypirate23 DIAMOND said...
on May. 18 2010 at 6:21 pm
faypirate23 DIAMOND, Fayetteville, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Take the road less traveled by.

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that is rlly rlly gud i loved it!!my mom used to call me sarbear lmao my names sarah too ;) i run track and love reading and writing u shud check out my stuff thx ;)
Sarbear GOLD said...
on May. 8 2010 at 8:53 am
Sarbear GOLD, Milan, Ohio
10 articles 4 photos 489 comments

Favorite Quote:
--Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you&#039;re a mile away from them and you have their shoes.<br /> --When life gives you lemons, squirt them in people&#039;s eyes.

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thank you :)
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on May. 7 2010 at 8:15 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper<br /> <br /> Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

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ooh i really liked it!!!! :)))))