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Thanks alot, I had fun

February 4, 2010
By ChildOfThePast SILVER, Raleigh, North Carolina
ChildOfThePast SILVER, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Things change. And friends leave. And life doesn’t stop for anybody."

You seemed so perfect,
If not clear to me,
How perfection,
Should look or be.
I seemed so lucky,
Happy to be yours.
Besides the fight;
Of my friends of war.
You said you loved me
I believed it too.
Ain’t it funny?
What love can do?
Bring together,
And break apart,
Never mind;
My lonely broken heart.
It came so slowly,
Ended too fast
Letting the feelings,
We fell and crashed,
Or burned shall I say,
You must have thought this was all child’s play
We ended,
You needed,
You ended it all;
Now tell me love
Was it worth it all?

The author's comments:
This is a poem when breathing was no longer possible because my heart was too broken to make a beat

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on Jun. 29 2011 at 8:51 pm
Afanen PLATINUM, Santa Rosa, California
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Favorite Quote:
"But you see, Meg, just because we don't understand doesn't mean that the explanation doesn't exist."

- Madeleine L'Engle, A Wrinkle in Time

This was quite lovely. I thought your rhyme scheme was good to; in my opinion they can seem contrived, but yours was very natural.

on May. 17 2010 at 5:00 pm
sunnyhunny PLATINUM, Litchfield, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."

Wow, I really like this.  Very relatable yet your style is unique.