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the morning is quiet MAG

October 24, 2009
By Lydia_the_dwarf PLATINUM, Jamison, Pennsylvania
Lydia_the_dwarf PLATINUM, Jamison, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Following the light of the sun, we left the old world." -Christopher Columbus

"You live by what you thrill to, and there's the end of it" -D. H. Lawrence

"If you're going through hell, keep going" -Winston Churchill

the morning is quiet and i (having just
woken up in the tangle of cool wrinkled
sheets still hazy below opaque clouds of dreams
beneath the ceiling) plod quietlysoftlyslowly

to the dim
front porch (ah, rough wood under sleep-softened
feet) with sweet dew on supple summer grass

and you, in the quiet morning (having just
woken from your own safe sheets)
separated by distance alone (gentle groggy
breaths) dance around your dreams,
still drenched in the mist of your mind, and
you picture me (recalling dreams on my frontporchplanet)
as you pictured me in your own
dizzy drowsiness

spiraling down;



to the morning,
the quiet morning (having just woken up)

The author's comments:
I based this poem off of e.e. cumming's poem "i carry your heart with me(i carry it in". I really loved the form and style, so I tried it out for myself!

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This article has 4 comments.

emattox SILVER said...
on Nov. 11 2011 at 10:52 am
emattox SILVER, Onancock, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
You must not lose faith in humanity. Humanity is an ocean; if a few drops of the ocean are dirty, the ocean does not become dirty. -Ghandi

Awh, I love this :)

on Apr. 30 2010 at 9:31 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

ohmygosh that was beautiful. really inspirational too! keep up the great work!

on Feb. 9 2010 at 9:20 pm
the_Horsegirl SILVER, Minneapolis, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
People need dreams, there's as much nourishment in 'em as food.
--Dorothy Gilman

If there is such a thing as truth, it is as intricate and hidden as a crown of feathers.
--Isaac Bashevis Singer

Really evocative. I love the part that goes "cool wrinkled/sheets still hazy below opaque clouds of dreams/beneath the ceiling". Your word choice is really good there.

on Jan. 26 2010 at 4:11 am
ephemeral_dream GOLD, Easterton Sands, Other
11 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know that place between asleep and awake, the place where you can still remember dreaming? thats where i love you peter pan, thats where i'll be waiting" Tinkerbell

this is really lovely, you've done a great job wit hthis form. You're language is really effective. x