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The Body MAG

December 5, 2008
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Is a body unconscious a person still?
No mind is present to govern its deeds.
Does a body have dreams, or a fate to fulfill?
No way to feel it when it bleeds.
Can I be a human, too?
Maybe I’m not even real.
But I am flesh, through and through?
Scratch it up, then let it heal.
Or can a monster have a mind?
An evil thing, or weeping ghost.
Are living and breathing intertwined?
A being punished for its host.
With electrical thoughts, is it ever alive?
Just a skin, an empty shell.
Is the soul really needed for the body to thrive?
A carcass washed up on the shores of hell.

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Electricity said...
on Apr. 26 2010 at 9:10 am
This is deep and beautiful. I love it. Great job!

Eilatan GOLD said...
on Apr. 24 2010 at 5:34 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
11 articles 1 photo 307 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

amazing sonnet. good job.

Kdominick11 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:02 pm
Kdominick11, Saugus, Massachusetts
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 i like this ballad

on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:59 am
KYLE199V5 BRONZE, SAUGUS, Massachusetts
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

on Apr. 12 2010 at 2:26 pm
Demon_of_Truth, Warrenton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm not a geek, I prefer the term 'intellectual bad-a**"

I loved this poem, it really makes you think about if there really is something else there.

H.F虫骷 said...
on Apr. 11 2010 at 8:57 am
Who can prove my living in this world,who will know me if one day i disappeard,what i will be after i die,am i really exist?Or,i am just in someone's dream?

on Apr. 8 2010 at 3:43 pm
i luv it! it reminds me of life and how we look at it and our selves.  i wondered what u meant for a while but i get it i want to see more work from you.

sausha said...
on Apr. 4 2010 at 10:18 am
hey man this aint that bad i can relate to it alot man u should be proud if urselff

on Apr. 2 2010 at 9:35 am
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
11 articles 8 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

that sent chills down my spine!!! (in a good way!) :)

blippi SILVER said...
on Mar. 18 2010 at 8:16 pm
blippi SILVER, Two Rivers, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"the words the happy say are but paltry melody, but those the silent feel are beautiful"-Emily Dickinson

wow....thats..its..there are no words!!! and thats really saying something! words are my life I always have words!

on Mar. 16 2010 at 1:01 pm
Queen_of_Hearts BRONZE, Memphis, Tennessee
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't love yourself, then who else will?

This is a really good poem. It makes you think. I love it

on Mar. 15 2010 at 11:19 pm
A.L.Sommer DIAMOND, Brookfield, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. It is our light, not our darkness, that most frightens us. We ask ourselves, 'Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented?' Actually, who are you not to be? You are a child of God. Your playing small does not serve the world; there is nothing enlightened about shrinking so that others won't feel insecure around you. We were all meant to shine as children do. We were all born to make manifest the glory of God that's within us - it's not just in some of us, it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same. As we are liberated from our own fear, our presence automatically liberates others."
-Nelson Mandela

i have two words: IN AWE

this poem is beautiful, deep, and thought provoking. Nice work

on Mar. 13 2010 at 6:15 am
delilahsky PLATINUM, Arlington, Massachusetts
28 articles 3 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just because her eyes don't tear doesn't mean her heart doesn't cry. And just because she comes off strong, doesn't mean there's nothing wrong

-Author Unknown

You are such a talented writer! This poem created amazing, vivid imagery for me...not many poems can do that for some reason, so congrats. Keep writing.

on Mar. 11 2010 at 8:07 pm
CoolBreeze PLATINUM, Winnemucca, Nevada
21 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
The fear of death follows from the fear of life. A man who lives fully is prepared to die at any time. ~Mark Twain

Wow great imagery. Awesome descriptions its a great poem.

on Mar. 11 2010 at 3:36 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Pretty good, I like it, the imagery is great.

JMrocz BRONZE said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:08 am
JMrocz BRONZE, Attica, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing can stop you from being terrible once you've learned how." -Holly Black

Absolutely love it!!! Keep it up =]

ChelseaSmith said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 1:01 pm
ChelseaSmith, Levant, Maine
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This poem. . . Makes you think whats real and what your meaning is, I mean. . . Some things are way more important to the world and yet we just look at the stupid stuff. . . It really made me think ( :

on Mar. 8 2010 at 11:15 pm
*~Lynx~* SILVER, Cathedral City, California
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you love someone, let them go. If they come back to you it was meant to be.......

Love it. Absolutely love it!

on Mar. 1 2010 at 6:17 pm
Lord_Limitless BRONZE, New Bern, North Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 21 comments
... stunning, amazing. love the rhyme scheme.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 8:25 pm
THEskaMuFFin BRONZE, Berthoud, Colorado
2 articles 2 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Desire is the cause for all your sickness and misery"
"When you realize how perfect everything is, you will tilt your head back and laugh at the sky."

Wow. This is defiantely a 'take a step back and do some breathing exercises' poem. The last line just hits it out of the park. Excellent.