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Gravity

April 5, 2009
By MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.

The author's comments:
I wrote this to reflect self sabotage

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on Mar. 10 2011 at 2:59 pm
ashleyn PLATINUM, Zeeland, Michigan
39 articles 2 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't take life to seriously, nobody makes it out alive anyways"-Unknown

I LOVE IT! I especially liked how you made the whole thing into a similie at the end...wonderfully done. Great job!

on Mar. 10 2011 at 2:30 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Wonderfully written with a lovely flow and truth to it...I sure hope the self-sabotage is not happening to you for you are too good for that...this is a beautifully constructed poem. :)

on Mar. 10 2011 at 10:44 am
RoseDewittBukater, Winnipeg, Other
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This is such a pretty and amazing work of art!;) Keep up the good work.

Coleyy GOLD said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 10:02 pm
Coleyy GOLD, Mission Viejo, California
13 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
We do not remember days, we remember moments.
Expect the unexpected.
Life will always through you curves. Just keep fouling them off. The right pitch will come. And when it does, be prepared to run the bases.

amazingg! i really like your word choice, it flows really well and says a lot :)

$parky14 said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 5:59 pm
That was beautiful and inspiring, you make it sound like Gravity is a person, a selfless, ever-moving person.=]

johnwall1 said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 7:32 am
MMMMMMMMEEEEEEEEEEENNNNNNNNNNN

johnwall1 said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 7:31 am
no, no... its okay

on Jan. 31 2011 at 9:02 pm
Bookworm7 SILVER, Middletown, New York
8 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be not afraid of greatness: some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them. -Willian Shakespeare

Your poem was absolutely intriguing and flowed nicely. I think that from the beginning to the end of the poem I was interested. It's great you really should write more.

on Jan. 26 2011 at 4:44 pm
Internal-Love PLATINUM, Queens, New York
33 articles 3 photos 310 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing's black or white, its all just a shade of gray---

















TI "Live your Life" ft Rihanna

this was short and meaningful and jaw-dropping and eye-glueing and beautiful and precious and better then any poem i could ever write and *deep breathe* DONT STOP WRITING!!!

on Jan. 25 2011 at 11:22 pm
shreya756 PLATINUM, Gurgaon, Haryana, Other
27 articles 4 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
When it gets dark only then can you see the stars...
If a million people believe in a foolish thing, it is still a foolish thing.

When I finished reading this, the only word that left my lips was 'WOW.' 

on Jan. 25 2011 at 12:16 pm
weaselkiesel BRONZE, Rochester, New York
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My theory is if you look confident, you can pull off anything"- Jessica Alba

I really like the beginning, how you used the same phrases over and over. Good job!

on Jan. 3 2011 at 9:30 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I agree with AnonyMiss. So awesome.

on Jan. 3 2011 at 7:06 pm
SaMiLoVe97 SILVER, Okawville, Illinois
9 articles 3 photos 105 comments

Favorite Quote:
If it doesnt break your heart it isnt love, if it doesnt break your heart its not enough. Its when youre breaking down with your insides coming out.Thats when you learn what youre made of.-Switchfoot<3

i LOVE this(: Great work. Keep writing:D <3 Sami

Gigantron GOLD said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 4:07 pm
Gigantron GOLD, Somewhere, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"There is a fundamental difference between religion, which is based on authority (imposed dogma, faith), [as opposed to] science, which is based on observation and reason. Science will win because it works."

-Stephen Hawking

What comes up must come down. Or, if phrased differently, being forced down by gravity is a necessary function of vertical propulsion.

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Nice work. :)


Johnwall said...
on Jan. 3 2011 at 12:44 pm
I COULD DO THE JOHN WALL TO THIS POEM !!!!

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on Jan. 3 2011 at 12:36 pm
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on Dec. 12 2010 at 2:34 pm
breeeegreen BRONZE, Watsonville, California
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this so beautiful, i cant even explain how amazing it is. but lets jsut say, you should keep writing poems.

on Dec. 12 2010 at 12:55 pm
justsmileanddance PLATINUM, Montgomery, Alabama
28 articles 42 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Happiness can be found, even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light.
-Albus Dumbledore

this is amazing!!! and so clever!! i would have never thought of that!! bravo!

AnonyMiss GOLD said...
on Nov. 20 2010 at 6:25 pm
AnonyMiss GOLD, Houston, Texas
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oh that is beautiful. i feel like i could have written these words it speaks to me so much.