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Invisible

November 2, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

Invisible,
Is that what I am?
A mere imagination
Inside your head?
Thoughtful,
I assumed you were,
Only to discover
You’re way below par.
Beautiful,
Is what you called me
That night,
Remember when?
Invisible,
To you
Is what I will remain,
Until you

Figure it out.



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on Oct. 5 2011 at 9:31 pm
A_Jean PLATINUM, Citrus Heights, California
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Favorite Quote:
"we all carry these things inside that no one else can see. they hold us down like anchors and they drown us out at sea."
"i'm trying to figure out which parts of my personality are mine and which ones I created to please you"

I totally relate to this. You seriously are a fabulous writer. Check out my stuff? Tell me what you think. :) 

linda ocampo said...
on Feb. 17 2011 at 9:46 am
linda ocampo, CICERO, Illinois
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this is so beutiful  i can realate to this since iam a special led person and is hard but iam so mature

carijoy SILVER said...
on Jan. 8 2011 at 5:32 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you, I'm glad you like it. And I look forward to reading some of your work when you get it up!!

JohnniK SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 2:05 am
JohnniK SILVER, Yongin, Other
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am"

I like this peom. Invisible... Like the title and the content of it. I can never write like this

on Dec. 29 2009 at 4:20 pm
LonWolfzHowl BRONZE, Mt.morris, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never say the world owes you anything. It was here First!!

you inspired me to join this group. Please when you get a chance read some of my work. Keep it up

Chautel said...
on Dec. 7 2009 at 1:44 pm
Chautel, Bolingbrook, Illinois
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love it love it love it

carijoy SILVER said...
on Nov. 29 2009 at 7:20 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you so much for your kind words!
And no, your work is not crap ! You are an excellent writer, even published in the magazine! Keep up the hard work. :) Find your way of expressing you through your words, you've got a lot going for you! :)

melone96 said...
on Nov. 22 2009 at 6:33 pm
melone96, White Sulphur Springs, West Virginia
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You continue to amaze me! I wish I could write like you! I write some poems but compared to yours they are crap (to put it plainly) ;) lol

carijoy SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2009 at 1:19 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
I agree with you. A strong heart is difficult to attain though, but I would rather have a strong heart than heartache.

on Nov. 17 2009 at 10:55 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words."

youre always welcome. i like your work. i admire it actually. and yes, i do know for one that our hearts act before our heads can assess the situation, but a strong heart can wait for the head to do its job first, dont you think?

carijoy SILVER said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 12:53 am
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
:) Thanks for your input. Looking back on it, I see that now. It seems that some guys have a really sly way of making everything seem like the girl's fault... but I'm glad I figured that out before he figured it out.

I agree, definitely not someone a person should look for or pursue, but sometimes your heart acts before your head can think.

I really appreciate all of your input. Thank you!

on Nov. 16 2009 at 7:33 pm
chrisbriones GOLD, Anaheim, California
11 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I believe nothing can be justly and completely explained by words."

I think youre wrong. you are not invisible to him. you are superior to that fool who remains ignorant and continues to submit to blindness and idiocy.

If he does not truly, and fully, commit to his words, then he is not a man, or at least not a man youre looking for.

i like this work as well.

Batwoman GOLD said...
on May. 8 2009 at 12:00 am
Batwoman GOLD, Middlebury, Indiana
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This was yet another amazing poem I loved it.

mmfdg623 GOLD said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 12:28 am
mmfdg623 GOLD, Lyndhurst, New Jersey
15 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Far away in the sunshine are my highest aspirations. I may not reach them, but I can look up and see their beauty, believe in them, and try to follow where they lead.
Louisa May Alcott

This poem is really good. I love it. Sometimes I feel that way too.

carijoy SILVER said...
on Apr. 15 2009 at 11:55 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you so much!

It all comes from the heart, and I'm glad you're feeling it. :)

on Apr. 15 2009 at 7:32 pm
_broken_heart_ BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
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I read poem after poem after poem. But yours they always speak out to me. Draw me and make me want more. I used as many poemsof your as I could for my favorties.

Bridie ELITE said...
on Mar. 2 2009 at 9:57 pm
Bridie ELITE, Massapequa, New York
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Favorite Quote:
She can because she thinks she can.

Again, amazing the theme you're using is great in all your poems. I can tell you write from the heart.