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Hold a candle (darling)

March 26, 2012
By WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
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Hold a candle to me darling,
I know what path to take
But here and now contrast to anywhere…
Feels too long a road, awake

Picture a pair of perfect fools
Know not half as much as feelings lay
While one lies in between them
The other sails from bay

Hold a candle to me darling,
Though your hand may waver dear
I don’t care ‘bout the steadfast light…
Only when it falters will I fear

If a brick is laid on another
Is not the position sound?
But lay 10 bricks along each-other
And the form of wall may round

Hold a candle to me darling,
I fear darkness as much as light
So in a world where yin deals yang away
I note that light is less than bright

© Ashley D., Philadelphia, PA

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Just a poem that randomly spilled out of my mind.
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SuNshiNe007 ELITE said...
on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:11 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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Wow, I absolutely love this! Amazing Job! For your first poem! Very creative! I give you 5 stars;) And its amazing your from Canada, I've been there before!
SuNshiNe007 ELITE said...
on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:11 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

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Wow, I absolutely love this! Amazing Job! For your first poem! Very creative! I give you 5 stars;) And its amazing your from Canada, I've been there before!
WritingVincent SILVER said...
on Mar. 28 2012 at 6:00 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

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"Everything comes from something."

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Thanks sweetheartless!
Sweetheartless GOLD said...
on Mar. 28 2012 at 5:47 pm
Sweetheartless GOLD, Sandston, Virginia
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"God is a comedian playing to an audience too afraid to laugh." -Voltaire

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I like it! It's soft but the message is very clear. Very nice work.
WritingVincent SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2012 at 4:09 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
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"Everything comes from something."

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Thank you! You're the first person to actually welcome me!

And I swear, I didn't do any editing or reviewing whatsoever. In reality, I wrote it directly into a tumblr post a few days ago; it's not even saved onto my computer!

beautifulspirit PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 27 2012 at 4:02 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

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Interesting poem! Are you sure you didn't spend a lot of time perfecting it? I especially liked the third and fifth stanzas. Great job~ Welcome to teenink!
WritingVincent SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2012 at 1:51 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

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&quot;Everything comes from something.&quot;

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Thank you! And there is too a story! Just kidding, that critique is very accurate :p I found that it had meaning/metaphorical description, but yes, it randomly came out and therefor was very...random?
Thanks for the rating and review!
Kev-Girl SILVER said...
on Mar. 27 2012 at 12:50 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
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Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :) <br /> <br /> Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing. <br /> <br /> If you cant annoy someone, there&#039;s no point in writing.<br /> <br /> Love is overrated, marry for money.

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I liked it. :) In the description, you say that this is just some random writing (which I actually do a lot of, hehe) and I could kind of see that in the poem. Not that that's a bad thing, but it was just kind of hard to find the meaning, or story, to this. 

But I honestly love your writing style, and the words you used to write this. It's not simple and plain, which I find facinating. Great job on thsi! :) Five stars!