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The Creature of Merr

December 19, 2011
Lovejuice GOLD,
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There lived a creature, so horrid and vile.
In the land of Merr, so fertile an isle.
The beast was armed with venom and claw,
A ton of teeth fitting crooked in it's yawning maw.
It hunted the living and haunted the night
Always lurking at the edge of waning firelight.
It gobbled up children, elders, priests and more.
There was little the monster didn't like to devour.

Eyes long since cast fell on a dipping sun,
And for these sad people their hope was none.
Smoke twisted into a tyrant's crown,
The monster emerged to finish the town.
But a lone form stood firm amidst the chaos and the cries.
A frail woman with determination burning strong in her eyes.
She lifted a sword to challenge the beast, drawing a line on the ground.
It growled and padded the earth as it sized up this creature of little renown.
"On this day, I shall send you on to your end!"
The beast charged, and she rose her blade up to defend.
She parried and countered with exceptional skill,
And at long last she rose her blade up over the beast to claim her kill.
Its monstrous head rolled off in a satisfying spurt of arterial spray,
and all of Merr celebrated that day.

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on Apr. 25 2012 at 2:37 pm
Ashley_Tucker, Granger, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Of course it is happening inside your head, Harry, but why on earth should that mean that it is not real? ~ Albus Dumbledore

This is excellent! One of the best I've ever seen on here to be honest. I couldn't find something that needed to be fixed if my life depended on it. I'm rating you five stars!

Check out mine? Thanks!

on Feb. 23 2012 at 11:23 pm
indimcmathz BRONZE, Vancouver, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Alternative to what?" -Bliss, from the movie "Whip It"

nice, i like it :)

on Feb. 9 2012 at 10:56 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where."
-James Clavell, "Shogun"

Nice! Reminds me of Beowulf. The poem, not the movie. ;)

-Kal- GOLD said...
on Jan. 21 2012 at 2:37 pm
-Kal- GOLD, Carthage, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Faith sees the invisible, believes the incredible, and recieves the impossible"

It reminds me of King Arthur.... I wonder why.... Lol :) Again, good job writing :)

TapTap SILVER said...
on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:22 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

Woah, this word choice and overall view and idea of the poem is way above my level. What i can tell from it, is that its very well written and has a message that can be interperated in many ways. LOVE IT keep writing ;)

Dkort BRONZE said...
on Dec. 31 2011 at 2:46 am
Dkort BRONZE, Encino, California
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Overall, the rhyming here is nothing short of brilliant. You've shown great command of that skill, and the second stanza is really powerful, as well. In terms of changing this if you are interested in editing, the first stanza may be a little slow to develop and slightly redundant. I enjoyed this though. The themes were really apparent, though subtly put. Great work and please keep writing :)