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Storm

May 22, 2010
By Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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A bright-lit city
Lights already on
Evening, cloudy night
Night floats on like swan.

Raining, pouring now
Quite sudden, vicious
Loud thunder rumbles
The sounds, malicious.

White bright lightning strikes
City lights humbled
By dazzling sky-fire
Leaving folk jumbled.

Inconspicuous,
Gradual, Storm ends
Thunder mumbles away
Goodbye, Storm, my friend.

The author's comments:
I saw a picture of a night lightning storm- beautiful.

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Lance BRONZE said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 9:55 am
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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Thank you, I certainly will.

Lance BRONZE said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 9:54 am
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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Well, gotta tell the truth. :D

 


on Jun. 23 2010 at 8:39 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin<br /> <br /> \&quot;If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\&quot; <br /> <br /> \&quot;If music be the food of love, play on.\&quot;

wow i really like this!!! its really good-very well written and very descriptive!!! please check out some of my work if you get the chance! :)

on Jun. 23 2010 at 4:05 pm
Shannon_Bananon, Loveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
About talking; why don&#039;t people ever think before they talk? It would save so much trouble; it would also save me from wanting to slap about half of the world&#039;s population.<br /> ~Fictional Character (Brilliant, but, sadly, fake.)

Well, you say it sounds malicious and vicious, but then at the end you say it's your friend. Don't you think those are harsh adjectives to be using on a buddy? I certainly think so.

Lance BRONZE said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:59 pm
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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Haha. When does it contradict, for example?

Lance BRONZE said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:59 pm
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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Thank you very much!

Lance BRONZE said...
on Jun. 23 2010 at 2:58 pm
Lance BRONZE, New York, New York
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Actually, if you look, it does rhyme at times... :P but thank you anyway.

on Jun. 22 2010 at 5:31 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

This is very rhythmic. I am glad that it did not rhyme. It conjured a very strong image of a storm.

I used to be afraid of storms, but not I find them to be very beautiful.


on Jun. 22 2010 at 10:30 am
beautifulworld SILVER, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
What&#039;s the point i wearing my favorite rocket ship underpants if no one asks to see them? -Calvin and Hobbes

It's very nice. I liked the rhythm you put to the words

on Jun. 22 2010 at 7:25 am
Shannon_Bananon, Loveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
About talking; why don&#039;t people ever think before they talk? It would save so much trouble; it would also save me from wanting to slap about half of the world&#039;s population.<br /> ~Fictional Character (Brilliant, but, sadly, fake.)

I feel as though it contradicts at times, but otherwise good. :D (I'm missing the lack of bees.)