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Dolls

January 21, 2010
By MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments

The dolls will come alive tonight
Into the light
We’ll have a fright
The dolls will come alive tonight

Every little girl and boy
Will see their toy
Their wonderous joy
Every little girl and boy

They’ll go parading in the street
With tiny feet
Until they meet
They’ll go parading in the street

The parents will not have a clue
Of what to do
About the zoo
The parents will not have a clue

They’ll dance around the town’s best square
With long loose hair
And fancy wear
They’ll dance around the town’s best square

From beds they’ll throw the garden flowers
Adding powers
With the hours
From beds they’ll throw the garden flowers

And then at last the night will end
The dolls will bend
Dreams will mend
And then at last the night will end


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on Sep. 14 2010 at 7:26 am
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
Haha thank you!

on Sep. 13 2010 at 7:57 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
4 articles 2 photos 285 comments

Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

Cute! I could totally see this in a book of children's poems...

on May. 2 2010 at 11:30 am
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

Haha yea I swear every little kid does:) and your welcome, a lot of the time I read other people's stuff and they never read mine. So thanks for reading, it means a lot!

on May. 2 2010 at 1:53 am
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
I used to think that too! Thanks for all the input!

on May. 2 2010 at 1:51 am
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
Thank you! Wow, I can't believe you read all of them...you sure have patience! :D

on May. 2 2010 at 1:32 am
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

This is my favorite so far, I used to think my stuffed animals would come alive when I was a little kid:)I had'nt thought about that in a long while!hahaha Anyway you did a really great job. I'd love to see this published:)

on Apr. 26 2010 at 11:16 am
shayna101 SILVER, Carlsbad, California
5 articles 0 photos 35 comments
wow! very creative I looooved the repetition. This reminds me of Dr. Suess or nursery rhymes. This piece is my favorite of all your articles (I read them all) You have talent but I like this one best. Keep writing! :)

on Apr. 9 2010 at 9:23 pm
ImDumbStruck DIAMOND, Springfield, Virginia
61 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If at first you don't succeed, destroy any evidence."

wow this is so good! I love the imagery it gives off, and the concept is really great too :)

on Feb. 18 2010 at 2:41 pm
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
.Thanks!!!

on Feb. 18 2010 at 2:40 pm
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
Thank you to you too!

on Feb. 18 2010 at 2:40 pm
MayaElyashiv PLATINUM, Ramat Hasharon, Other
37 articles 4 photos 193 comments
Thank you so much for the input! Do you think you could take a look at some more? For some reason I only get comments on "Dolls" and on none of the others...and "Dolls" isn't my best piece!

on Feb. 17 2010 at 7:59 pm
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

This was very good, but I think the repetition of the first sentences in the stanzas was a little unnecessary until the final section of the poem. I loved the beat and rhyming though, it was excellent. Keep up the good work!

Nelle:) said...
on Feb. 10 2010 at 11:48 am
Nelle:), Meriott, Other
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
'The danger here is that eccentricity will become standardised, predictable: something to be labelled and bottled' Vogue

Thank-you for the positive feedback it's really appreciated :) and this is maagical really enchanting, I love it !

on Feb. 3 2010 at 9:56 pm
This is great!!

big daddy said...
on Feb. 2 2010 at 2:31 pm
Amazing. Nothing less.

DDuck said...
on Feb. 2 2010 at 7:09 am
Powerful! great beat.

on Feb. 1 2010 at 11:35 am
goddess_of_the_moon_123 SILVER, Beaverdam, Virginia
5 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
'To unpath'd waters, undream'd shores' ~ William Shakespeare, A Winter's Tale

Really cool! Love the imagery!