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Our Lady Hope

January 19, 2010
By AshlynSerora BRONZE, Riverview, Florida
AshlynSerora BRONZE, Riverview, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Always found in ink wells and paper hearts..


Of all fragile things to recollect,
Remembered rebirth of heart
And all of hope, in her eternal aspect.
Recall the notions from the start,
The genesis of strife and loss,
For in her realms she played her part.
Reality fell for the strike of her toss
And uncertainty became her joy,
Fitful in the grace of heavenly gloss,
Forever, alas, her earthly toy.
Deep in untouchable recess,
Her actions calm and coy,
Though her call upon the heart redressed.
Cared for, for her unbound innocence.
Tragic hearts denied her, for histories confess.


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Jess95 GOLD said...
on Jun. 15 2010 at 8:40 pm
Jess95 GOLD, Morgan Hill, California
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Favorite Quote:
If I were you I&#039;d promise to live life for all it&#039;s worth, take all you&#039;ve been given and leave your mark upon this Earth. Trust your heart to show you everything you need...and if you were you, I&#039;d fall in love with me. -unknown<br /> <br /> <br /> fear not, for I am with you;<br /> <br /> <br /> be not dismayed, for I am your God;<br /> <br /> I will strengthen you, I will help you,<br /> <br /> <br /> I will uphold you with my righteous right hand.<br /> (Isaiah 41:10 ESV)

This is amazing. So deep! It flows really well and it's unique. I loved it...P.S. sorry it took me so long to comment...and thanks for what you said about my poem My Best Friend...some times I find my self thinking "Was it worth it, what I did, was it worth losing my best friend" but it's words such as the ones you wrote that reassure me...So thank you.

on Jan. 28 2010 at 10:09 am
AshlynSerora BRONZE, Riverview, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Always found in ink wells and paper hearts..

Thanks! :) This is actually one of the few where I do use rhyme as a foundation. Most of the time I don't bother trying to fit my work into a scheme.

Amelie13 GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 11:19 pm
Amelie13 GOLD, Burlington, Iowa
11 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Yet ah! why should they know their fate?&nbsp;<br /> Since sorrow never comes too late,&nbsp;<br /> And happiness too swiftly flies.&nbsp;<br /> Thought would destroy their paradise.&nbsp;<br /> No more; where ignorance is bliss,&nbsp;<br /> &#039;Tis folly to be wise.&quot; - Thomas Gray, exerpt from &#039;An Elegy Written in a Country Churchyard&#039;

I think it's pretty good! It has an obvious passion that I can rarely produce in my poetry. On the criticism side: try to write some poetry that doesn't rhyme on every line. I personally believe that rhyming should be used as an accent, not a foundation. Otherwise good :)