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Hush, hush

December 18, 2009
By sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous


Hush, hush, don't cry.
Dream of sweet, sweet lullabies,
rocking away
all the cares that you carry.

Don't be afraid
to take my shoulder to cry;
I will not mind
if you cry there all day long.

Your pain pouring,
flowing out of you on me,
but I don't mind
as long as your burden lightens.

Your whimpers cut,
stab my chest as you sob hard,
so hard you hurt,
as if you could afford pain.

But you are strong,
stronger than I'll ever be.
You amaze me,
yet I see you are still weak.

So let me love
every burden and weight you have;
they create you,
beautiful creature I love.

Hush, hush, don't cry.
Dream of sweet, sweet lullabies,
rocking away
all the cares that you carry.


The author's comments:
I was having a horrible day at school. None of my friends seemed to care about my problems, and I wrote to imagine what I wish someone would have said to me during the day.

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on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:06 am
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
30 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Thanks. I appreciate all the feedback.

on Aug. 16 2010 at 8:07 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

:) aww that was seriously beautiful... it was verry comforting, nd it made me smile

on Aug. 13 2010 at 2:38 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
30 articles 0 photos 332 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Thanks for the comments. This is one of my least favorites, and I totally agree that it's wordy. I'm glad someone finally said something about it.

on Aug. 13 2010 at 12:22 pm
babigerl1194 PLATINUM, Margaretville, New York
23 articles 10 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
wat doesnt kill you only makes you stronger

it was just a little wordy perhaps. the form makes it look really pretty though! and im sure anybody would love to have you as a friend and for you to say this to them and i know if i saw my friends crying id say something like this. just you made it sound so much more beautiful and soft. it has a soft touch to it, you know? : )

on Jul. 28 2010 at 8:25 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
20 articles 0 photos 267 comments

Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

this was endearing. it could be a song or like a secret lullaby you tell to someone who was having a bad day like you were.

this poem was cute. i liked it a lot


on Jun. 30 2010 at 7:00 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

Aw! I totally see why you would love to have someone say that to you. I am deeply moved, which kinda shows how sad I am, but whatever. The only criticism I have is on the flow, I thought it could have flowed better, but other than that, I loved it!  

kysh15 said...
on Mar. 23 2010 at 10:24 pm
kysh15, Edmonds, Washington
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this is amazing, so easy to connect to

on Feb. 24 2010 at 4:44 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

I really liked this. I agree with AguaGem on that line

AquaGem SILVER said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 1:12 am
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.

Liked it a lot! really enjoyed this line "as if you could afford pain".

on Jan. 19 2010 at 3:16 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 577 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

Hey this is actually pretty good. I can't write poems to save my life. :) Keep writing!!