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lost love

December 5, 2009
By jessi GOLD, Nunya, Florida
jessi GOLD, Nunya, Florida
15 articles 4 photos 115 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When injustice becomes law, rebellion becomes duty."


I wish to go o'er the sea again
o'er the sea and shore
back to where I once found you
standing at your door.

my love, you said you'd wait forever
forever, and a day
that was true until I left,
I left and went away

I came back in a year
went back up to my love's door
but where you once stood,
now a man trod upon that floor.

I wished to go o'er the sea again
o'er the sea to that shore
that shore where I once found you
but my love won’t be there anymore


The author's comments:
i was couldnt sleep one night, and when i was trying to sleep on hte couch, part of this popped in my head. so i wrote a poem, deleted all of it, and then wrote this. :) feedback would be awesome, because i know its not that good!

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on May. 4 2011 at 5:30 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow!! i kinda don't know what to say now. that was amazing! i like how the poem took you on a sort of journey. plus there's a lot of truth and emotion you portrayed easily in this :) 5 stars all the way! :) wouldy you mind commenting on some of my newer work? i'd love some feedback. keep writing :)

East17 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 13 2011 at 12:33 pm
East17 BRONZE, Brunswick, Maine
3 articles 1 photo 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like bubbles, it makes me smile
-double bubble boy XD

this is amazing! keep it up

would you mind looking at some of my writing i'd appreciate it :D


jessi GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2010 at 1:34 pm
jessi GOLD, Nunya, Florida
15 articles 4 photos 115 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When injustice becomes law, rebellion becomes duty."

aww! thanks! :)

on Apr. 5 2010 at 7:07 pm
Supernova7 GOLD, Redford, Texas
16 articles 6 photos 394 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let me cry my tears let me live in sorrow as long as you promise to be with me tomorrow
By Me:)

awwwwww I loved it:)

jessi GOLD said...
on Feb. 15 2010 at 12:33 pm
jessi GOLD, Nunya, Florida
15 articles 4 photos 115 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When injustice becomes law, rebellion becomes duty."

thank you!

on Feb. 14 2010 at 4:54 pm
BrittanyHale SILVER, Orlando, Florida
6 articles 1 photo 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
A Kiss is a lovely trick,designed by nature to stop word when speech becomes superflous.

When another person reads it Theyll love it as much as I do.Ahmazing...

jessi GOLD said...
on Jan. 21 2010 at 3:36 pm
jessi GOLD, Nunya, Florida
15 articles 4 photos 115 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When injustice becomes law, rebellion becomes duty."

wow thanks! glad someone likes it =)

kheart SILVER said...
on Jan. 13 2010 at 7:07 pm
kheart SILVER, Union Grove, Wisconsin
9 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Every second is countless. Every minute is different. When you came around." -kheart

This is an awesome poem! I really love it! It is on my favorite poetry list! Thanks for the comment on mine!