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These Black Petals

June 20, 2009
By ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac


I’m standing in the middle of a storm
With black petals in my hair
The rain is constantly falling
Hiding the tears that are shedding from my eyes

These black petals that cling to my hair
These black petals that I wear
Used to be red, the color of my heart
Until my heart was burned
Turning it black, cold, and dead

As such, these black petals will resemble my hurt
These black petals will create an image
These black petals will hold a meaning

These black petals that cling to my hair
These black petals that I wear

I ask myself
Will they ever be red again?
These black petals
I tell myself
Will never be red again.

But who am I to determine my fate?
Who am I to question the path of my fate?

For now, I stand in the middle of this storm
Under the rain that is constantly falling

These black petals that cling to my hair
These black petals that I wear
Are, for the moment, still there.


The author's comments:
I wrote this piece, not from a heartbreak of a lover, but from the heartbreak of a loved one.

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tbkeleli said...
on Dec. 23 2009 at 11:50 pm
ohhh great work on this one. this poem has some strength to it

on Aug. 15 2009 at 7:58 pm
ramnapotter PLATINUM, Toronto, Other
26 articles 1 photo 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Write to be understood, speak to be heard, read to grow...”

Once again, we meet. Wow. Out of most of your pieces, I must I say I adore this one. Please read my other pieces as well.

on Jul. 30 2009 at 11:15 pm
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
75 articles 11 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

Sad,sharp

on Jul. 30 2009 at 4:07 am
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
4 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne

I like it...but i think it i a too repetitive. Beside that i absolutely love. I get the concept very well.

on Jul. 11 2009 at 9:16 pm
scotttyboy SILVER, St.paris, Ohio
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you're a very talented writer....i feel like this poem expresses a lot of emotions that we all feel.....i loved it! hope you're doing better! (:

on Jul. 8 2009 at 5:36 pm
OoODerekOoO BRONZE, Kinde, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 19 comments
This is good, and the picture you chose suits it very well. I'm sorry for the heartbreak you went through, i hope all is well now.

on Jul. 7 2009 at 5:14 am
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD, N/A, California
16 articles 0 photos 58 comments
very intriguing

on Jul. 7 2009 at 12:10 am
VisionTru PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
41 articles 6 photos 28 comments
awww i had chills, i like it a lot..:) good job