Here's my impression from the first 5 or so chapters.   Your plot moves way too fast. You need to slow down a bit and take the time to show your reader the details instead of just telling them to us. For example, in the first chapter, you tell everyone that the main character is the laughing stock of the school. Instead, how about backtracking a few days and writing a scene with the main character at school, and reflect a little on his thoughts there. This does take a lot of work, but it gives your novel so much more depth and integrity, instead of just skimming the surface with a bunch of action scenes. You also need to work on showing language vs. telling language, but then again, so does everyone (myself included). I won't go into what showing v. telling language is, since I've gone on long enough.   On another note, I really enjoyed the content of the story. The plot has a lot of potential, just work on the general writing.

This is phenomenal! The suspense is almost too much! Keep it up Eric M. :)

This is my first visit to Teen Ink as I was introduced to it by a young man who authored "Virtually Lost".

I very much enjoyed "Virtually Lost" and look forward to reading more from him.