When I wrote this piece I did it with ease. Right when Mr. Olsen said think of a moment or person that inspires you or has inspired you I thought of all the AQHYA stuff that I have been involved in. But the first thing that summed it all up was Gateway of Champions. AQHYA is the biggest part of my life because I’m so involved and I have been doing it since I was a little girl. I had always dreamed of being one the top girls in the state and had always wanted to be one of the few people that would ever attend the world show. I had always looked up to those riders and now I’m one of them. I have put in countless time and effort to get where I am.

I don’t know who influenced this essay it could have been Mr. Olsen for telling me to think of an inspirational moment or my horse that has gotten me that far. It could have been my mom that has spent all the money and taken me all over the country or possibly my trainers that have made me the rider I am today. It could also be AQHYA in general and all the people I have met.

The piece started out as just one of the experiences I had going through the Gateway of Champions. Then slowly, but surely it transformed into how it is shaping my life and how it has already. Sometimes I wonder how much different I would be without the horses. If I would have been a druggy or one of those girls that are involved in everything and do every single sport. I’m so glad that didn’t happen to me, I have friends like that but it just isn’t me, I’m very content as being just there. I probably transformed this piece because I was going no where with it and something had to be changed. I think the change was good, but it is very sudden which I don’t mind I just hope that doesn’t effect what the reader thinks of me. Nothing was really taken away from the piece, I just changed a couple words. I mostly added on to the piece to explain the metaphor and how it has made me the person I am. I used a metaphor in the essay, it was competition is a metaphor for life. You have your ups and downs in competition just like you do in life. Also you have to be dependent on only yourself because at one point in time they won’t be there and you will have to fend for yourself. Also even if you make a tiny mistake that messes things up a little you have to blow it off otherwise you will start doing even more poorly and your confidence in yourself goes down. I also used a simile, confidence is the key to a successful life. If you don’t have confidence how do you expect yourself to do good at whatever your doing. Even if you have to make yourself look confident for the time being just try to pull it off and it can actually do a lot for you. For example at an interview that you are not to sure of just go in acting confident and like you know what your doing and you could end up succeeding and earning the job or whatever it is.

I have added a lot of dialogue. I don’t think it would be the same at all if there wasn’t any. It helps explain what it was like and how intense this moment was for me. All that I did to enhance the piece was add my simile and metaphor and make sure that there was details and dialogue. I organized my piece by writing what happened from the time that I got over to the warm up arena to the time I entered. Then I wrote how I thought all of this has made me.
This piece is different than my usual writing because I usually just tell a story and don’t have any literary elements or a paragraph that sums everything up about myself. This piece describes how I do things in my life and how much drive I have to do the best I can possibly do. When people are done reading this I want them to think about how confidence is a key to a successful life and that I apply it. I don’t want them getting done and thinking what is going on what is this girl talking about. This piece should have some nervousness and then it should build up into confidence. In this essay is a memory that I would like to last forever because maybe someday I won’t be able to have horses or will have something happen to me that won’t allow me to be involved in AQHA, but I will always have those memories remembering what I had and how much I poured myself into it. This piece could have a lasting effect on people if they really thought about what I have said in my essay about confidence and how much effort I put in for just a couple minutes in the arena. This will have a lasting effect on me because it will obviously decide if I get the scholarship or if I am accepted to the school. But also I hope that I will go by this my whole life and I hope that it never fades in my mind. If it does I will become a completely different person. I know that I might not always follow it in certain things, but if my mind is set to it then it will always be applied.