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Hello, I am Sin

September 13, 2009
By Bristow BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
Bristow BRONZE, Chesapeake, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Hello, I am Insanity.

I am the white rabbit and the hole you chased it down. I am every Cheshire grin reflected in every mirror hall, and every bleeding rose in every shard when you break them. I am the madness behind every hatter at every tea party. I am the bottle that asks you to drink me. I am the cake that begs you to eat me. I am the caterpillar, watching from the mushroom as you struggle to remember who you are and what you’ve become. I am that you in your looking glass that flips reality backwards and is off with your head.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Deception.

I am every pretty lie he whispered in your ear, on summer nights when you were naïve enough to believe them all. I am the blush on your cheeks, the eye shadow on your lids that hides your disappointment from prying eyes. I am the gloss on your lips that smiles prettily when others ask, and the mascara on your lashes that looks away when you pass him. I am both your charade and your masquerade. I hide your tears and your eyes, your heart and your wrists. I am the shroud you’ve placed over the world in hopes of believing that underneath it there is still some mercy, some angel to save you. And then again, I am also your hopes.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Despair.

I am the circles under your eyes from sleepless nights. I am that cyan glare tattooed on your retinas, printed by each number of the alarm clock you’ve spent watching. I am that darkness pressing in on you, the cracks in your chewed fingernails, the grimy streaks on your face left by tears. I am the salt seeping into the cuts on your bitten lips. I am the wet and I am the cold and I am everything you hate but want so badly. I am that empty pit when you try to laugh and the red in your eyes when you try to cry. I’m your numb feet and your shaking hands and your chattered teeth. I am the hands that twist around your heart and squeeze, and I am the bubble of the scream that never leaves your throat.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Torment.

I am the person you see in the mirror every morning while you’re applying your face from a lipstick tube. I am the catch in your breath, the light in your eyes. I am that window to your soul that you can never close. I am that thing threatening to rip off your mask and expose you for what you are, and I am your fear of that happening. I am the butterflies in your stomach, and I am the one killing the butterflies. I am the one ripping off their wings one by one, and shoving them down your throat for you to swallow. I am the one pinning each longing glance to your heart with needles of hopelessness.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Destruction.

I am fire. I am smoke. I am the toxic clouds around your head, the torn asphalt beneath your feet, the broken glass in your heels. I am the skeletons of skyscrapers made of steel bones and brick skin. I am all that once was becoming all that will not be, and you standing in the wreckage. I am your mind wondering why, as your naïve belief in peace and fairy tales comes crashing down. I am your wings, crumpled and broken as you realize you cannot fly. I am the hole where your heart was torn out by corruption, and I am corruption itself.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Chaos.

I am screams of terror on humid, starless nights. I am broken windows and vandalized drug stores. I am the crow bar beating against your iron gate, your bloody handprints on the shower curtain. I am cracked fluorescent lights and grimy bathroom tiles puddled with water. I am the shadows swimming in your glassy eyes, the liquor at your lips, the laughter in your throat. I am the secret desires hidden behind locked doors. I peek at you from the keyhole in Pandora’s box, shaking your tempered frame, and when you release me I will be demons with red eyes and anarchy hidden as embodiments of power and control.

I am a nature of sin.

Hello, I am Death.

I am the spots of black in your vision, the water rushing down your throat when you try to breathe. I am the face you see in the noose hanging from your basement ceiling. I was the gun you ate yesterday, then I became the blackness, the nothingness, the emptiness. I am the fire and the brimstone, the light and the revelation. I am the graveyard dirt blanketing you in murky warmth. I am the worms that feed on your flesh. I am the blood sprayed across your couch, and all that’s left of you anymore. I am what’s waiting for you, I am what’s beckoning you. I am a shroud and a coffin and a scythe all at once. I am the harvester of human lives, and I am both heaven and hell. A demon and a god. And as you fall asleep for the last time, I become you.

I am the beginning and end of all sin.

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on Apr. 8 2011 at 5:18 pm
tikapeek97 BRONZE, Waterboro, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
"good things come in small packages" =)

wow that was great...different, but great


Tyana BRONZE said...
on Apr. 8 2011 at 7:20 am
Tyana BRONZE, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
" If You Love Someone Let Them Go & If They Come Back They Were Always Yours & If They Dont They Were Never Yours At All "

This is amazing, i love it. good work!

on Mar. 21 2011 at 7:49 pm
ashyshadow BRONZE, Quinlan, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
eyes are the window to your soul

dude this is so wow i couldnt stop

reading its amazing and the best

thing that i have ever read i hope

 ur a writer one day ill buy all ur 


on Feb. 1 2011 at 6:45 pm
nobodyanymore, Austin, Texas
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This is fantastic. Beatuiful. I love it. You're so talented! I was actually a little scared while reading it. The metaphors and word choice and everything just flows together magnificently. (:

MosoSem GOLD said...
on Oct. 14 2010 at 9:27 am
MosoSem GOLD, Maseru, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm beautiful in my way, because God makes no mistakes, baby I was born this way!", Lady Gaga.

This is officially my favorite piece ever! Dude, you are T-A-L-E-N-T-E-D

on Aug. 9 2010 at 4:57 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me
As you're longing to sing" -AFI

"Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I'm afraid you're never satisfied." -Neon Trees

this is amazing! it's really dark, just up my alley ^^ check out some of my work

on Jun. 25 2010 at 6:25 am
Prisoner_of_Life BRONZE, Merced, California
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dude this is wicked sick. you have talent. dark talent, but talent nonetheless.

MeganN BRONZE said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:10 pm
MeganN BRONZE, Beaverton, Oregon
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It's unbelievable how much this draws you in. It's creepy and haunting in the best way, and extremely well written.

on Jun. 4 2010 at 3:08 pm
Pjqueen12 BRONZE, Hubbard, Oregon
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I agree :-D great job!!

on May. 25 2010 at 3:52 pm
Fredwardness SILVER, Romeo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"The stars are blazing like rebel diamonds cut out of the sun" -The Killers (Read My Mind)

"If you don't know where you're going, any road will take you there." -George Harrison

 I really like this...it's so...dark and beautiful.

on May. 13 2010 at 2:16 pm
ellemarie BRONZE, Georgetown, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Afterwards, the universe will explode for your pleasure." -Douglas Adams

That was...very good.  I was shocked by the bluntness of all the natures of sin, but also intrigued by the bareness of it.  Very well written.  Superb, even.  Keep writing.

on May. 13 2010 at 11:57 am
RyanDouglass GOLD, Geneva, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind."- Dr. Seuss

That was amazing. The imagery was fantastic! The format is genius. You are a great writer!

5 stars. Really, really good.

on May. 12 2010 at 7:53 pm
Ricky_Wolf BRONZE, Spartanburg, South Carolina
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Wow thats really good. Very poetic. 5 stars. Please check out my story...

on Mar. 30 2010 at 10:26 am
RosemarieCraig GOLD, Gloucestershire, Other
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Favorite Quote:
A man can no more diminish God's glory by refusing to worship Him than a lunatic can put out the sun by scribbling the word, 'darkness' on the walls of his cell."
"The world is not inherited from our ancestors. It is borrowed from our children"

WOW!!! You sure can write, man!!!!

amorey5 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 15 2010 at 8:26 am
amorey5 BRONZE, Fonda, New York
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i was amazed at how much i liked this. it was a good read and i thought you got your point, theme, across well. definitly a thriller and good job once again

on Nov. 8 2009 at 4:05 pm
chargertien GOLD, Forest Hill, Maryland
14 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life sucks and is unfair. But when a melody dances in the wind, stop and enjoy the peacefulness.

Amazing story. It's like a poem but it's not. Again amazing story

on Oct. 30 2009 at 11:04 am
t1g3rl1ly BRONZE, Franklin, Maine
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Amazing similies and metaphors. I love your word choice and the mental images that appear when I read it. **Favorited**

on Oct. 28 2009 at 3:02 pm
Skaterkid797 BRONZE, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't think of the past it brings back tears don't think of the future it only brings fears just think of now and be happy."

Wow very powerful words but great none the less good work I like this erie story