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Bump In the Floor

April 6, 2009
By Amber1994 GOLD, Roanoke, Illinois
Amber1994 GOLD, Roanoke, Illinois
15 articles 6 photos 45 comments

Protruding from the vomit-colored carpet in a bump. It’s been there for years. I accept that you would think nothing of this, but no you must dream and fantasize on this very topic. Better yet, I will tell you the story of how it came to be. Though you may not believe, it is all truth.

Human remains; that is what the bump is. Years ago a well-known student, much like a shadow, committed suicide. This young suicidal student was Willis, and to this day his spirit haunts the school. He and his one and only friend, Philander, nominated assistant, captured a death adder snake. Inserting the venomous fangs into Willis’s body while he slept. This way was most painless rout they could think of. After Willis’s body was stiff as a board, blue as the ocean and cold as sleet, Philander dissected the corpse. Ear by ear, toe by toe, tooth by tooth, he dismembered the body. Burying each chunk of human flesh around the school.

Then Philander fabricated a story of how Willis’s family had retreated in the night from the law. The student body never seemed to believe this story though. The night after he disappeared strange happenings arose. Things disappeared, broke, and moved seemingly on their own. The room warm and toasty would bring a sudden chill, like a northern wind. A quiet room would have a silent whisper in the air, always the same words chanting “ I have come and I have gone, you have come, but yet to be gone!”

Philander eventually lost his intellect and forced to move into a psychiatric facility. Willis, the one he assisted in murder. Never confiding in a single soul with this horrible deed. There he was greatly feared by the other inmates, keeping mostly to himself. Dying a lonely man his greatest wish a friend.

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This article has 2 comments.

on Sep. 23 2009 at 8:13 pm
hannahbee7 DIAMOND, Boca Raton, Florida
67 articles 1 photo 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know you’re a writer if your friend tells you a heartbreaking story and your first reaction is – wow, that would make an incredible plot for a novel. You know you’re a smart writer if you manage to keep that reaction to yourself."

It was quite good, if not a bit morbid. Keep writing and I would love it if you comented on somthing of mine haha

on Apr. 20 2009 at 6:16 pm
Denae Worcester BRONZE, Castle Rock, Colorado
1 article 0 photos 31 comments
I feel compelled to always explain myself.

I liked the style, the way the reader and narrator were detached from the story's events. The way it went, we didn't have to know much about Willis or Philander's personality. It was all told like an account, or a history.

There are quite a few grammar problems, distracting typos. Otherwise it was pretty interesting.

Oh, and a death adder? If Philander had it bite Willis while he was asleep, then Willis didn't commit suicide. He just told Philander to kill him. What kind of school is this anyway?