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It's Your Time!

October 29, 2008
By Anonymous

As he looks out the window, Kal notices the sky changed from an Ocean blue to a Crimson fire-pit red. Kal ignored the red sky and proceeds to close the window, when somthing caught his eye. A shadow, like an empty black pit, standing next to the pine tree in his front yard. Kal leaned forward trying to clear his vision. Kal finally focused his eyes on the Shadow, but the shadow moved faster than Kal's eyes could move,the Shadow shifting in and out of focus. Kal shrugged " That nothing, it's just my imagination. " Kal closed the window and walked away.

The hair on Kal's arms began to stand on end, his breath became thick like smoke. He crossed his arms trying to conserve what heat he had left, the freezing cold air nipping at his ears and nose. Kal whispered to himself " What happened to the heat? " . Hoping that he would get an answer from the dead cold night, But all he could hear was the dreadful wind pounding on his window. Drops of water hammered the roof of his house, thunder and lightning filled the sky. A loud snap of thunder made Kal jump. Kal whipped his eyes towards the window. The shadow hovering outside the window, Kal's mouth hanging wide open and eyes as wide as the moon. Kal backed up away from the window slowly as the shadow passed right through his window and floated up to him. Kal noticed It's blood red eyes stabbing him through the heart.

The shadow opened It's cloak to reveal a maze of ribs and bones, It was as skinny as twig. Kal stared in to the cloak until a human face pushed it's self from the shadow's stomach. Kal fell back onto the ground screaming in fear pulling himself away from the shadow. Kal grabbed anything he could get his hands on and started to throw them at the shadow, everything would just pass right through It's body and crash against the wall behind it. The shadow bent down to Kal's level and stared into Kal's eyes. At that moment a bright light sprung from the shadows chest. Kal blinded by the light asked the shadow " Am I dead? " The shadow shook It's head up and down. The shadow reached it's hand out towards Kal. Kal took It's hand and the shadow help Kal off the ground.The shadow lead Kal into the light. ...............Kal Pence R.I.P!

The author's comments:
I have had this story bouncing back and forth in my head, And I've wanted to put it on paper for a very long time! Ummm I was inspired to write this when My friend Aaron told me kept seeing shadows in his front lawn. He was really freak'in out!

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on Aug. 7 2021 at 5:33 pm
bookmage SILVER, Montreal, Quebec
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody said it had to be a story with an ending all neatly tied up like some ridiculous fairytale. This story's true, and true stories don't have endings, because things just keep going."
-Kate Milford

Cool, but you should replace "Kal" with something else occasionally... (the boy? the man? the scared teen? I don't know, he's your character...)

on Aug. 7 2021 at 4:39 am
Crazywolfiegirl2 PLATINUM, Kington, Other
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Favorite Quote:
There is something infinitely healing in the repeated refrains of nature—the assurance that dawn comes after night, and spring after winter. —Rachel Carson

I love how the eerie mood managed to turn so peaceful at the end

on Sep. 18 2017 at 11:44 am
Turtleperson44, Fort Wayne, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Do it right, with a smile, or don't do it at all." -- Frank Devereaux, Supernatural, Season 7

Umm. Some of the grammar was screwy, but yeh. Good.

on Mar. 30 2016 at 8:35 am
CalvinOlson BRONZE, Wyoming, Michigan
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Cool piece, it feels very melancholy and makes the ending feel really light and airy. Good story.

on Dec. 19 2013 at 5:55 am
Jackiee36 PLATINUM, Reading, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Aim for the moon so even if you miss you'll still be among the stars

great story, very peaceful ending but i would use the word nodding instead of shaking his head up and down, confused me a little but yh other than that it was a very nice story, please rate and comment my wor too :)